First draft

After collecting all the shots together and choosing the correct program (which isn't the program that the school suggests) we fabricated this first draft after hours of filming. Very rough which needs tweaking and we will show this to the class and improve the piece in accordance of their feedback.



At first glance, I can already identify a couple of mistakes such as the very long opening scene which needs shortening and the unrealistic glass smashing.

In order to achieve a wider range of feedback we created questionnaires to give us a deeper depth of information than we as makers of the film can't see. Here is an example of one of the questionnaires and the critisms we faced.